Meotsuburu's Comments
It's good that you're trying something outside your comfort zone. Best wishes with...
Hey Michael,
I read Pink Elephants and looked over your comments. Your tags lis...
Thanks for the help. I updated the title to Death of a High School Writer. Much ap...
Thanks again Bruce. I think in my direct reply after your first comments, I said I...
The first scene is supposed to drag, it's a sense that you're in the lecture with ...
The 2nd draft with name changes is just that, nothing else notably different.
I...
Hey japostal, been a while since we last spoke. Good to see you again.
For the ...
As credit to Peter Barsocchini's HSM, I made no attempt to mask character names. H...
Thanks JesuOtaku for you detailed comments, I'll see about working them into the s...
Hey Angela,
I had a look at this script and here are some notes:
The first b...
Hi Angela.
I'm currently working on my 2nd draft and I felt Gabriella manages t...
Wayne,
I got one of your posts and I read your apology. Two bits of advice for ...
Hey girlnextdoor2210,
I read your script and here are some notes:
The first ...
Sorry Bruce,
I mistook you for another member here. =/
Your comments helped ...
Hey Bruce,
I had a look at this and here are some notes:
The first hello rev...
Hey Sofluid.
You and mromer motivated me to proof the first draft (work still n...
Thanks for your time Cheryl.
I honestly missed those sp. errors when I was edit...
Hey Jack,
This one is especially short, not sure if you read any of the other c...
Hey Mike,
I tried to send you a PM but it got stuck in my outbox, also no luck ...
Hey Mitchell,
I read your script and there were a few things I took note of.
...
Hey Mike,
Just wanted to give you a poke.
I am about to wrap up one of my pr...
Hey Mike,
I wanted to comment on this but held off until I heard what you were ...
I'm near a feature length script with this. The ending has some humor I'm toying w...
Someone loves Joe.
I had a look at the script and it's not very developed. It h...
Hey Mike,
Thanks for the read. I've been getting that feedback where there is l...
Hey carguy29,
I read Ashland and here are some notes I took while reading.
K...
Thanks for the read Marco.
Keeping to the matter and expecting freshness seems ...
Hey Marco, let me invite you to read one of my high school projects:
http://pc.ce...
DJ.
Thanks for the read, I sent you a PM to answer your questions. It does have...
Mike,
I enjoyed the read. It was a pleasure and I'd be happy to do it again whe...
Judd Apatow of the 40-Year Old Virgin and Knocked Up credit has said, "Shocking Am...
This is a ridiculous, gratuitous, and biting farce-- hilarious!
One of the majo...
Thanks for the response Jay. The next few scenes at the date can really turn out b...
Hmmm... Theo's last line at the Diner and Iris' anger boiling over, I don't think ...
Dude is cumbersome. This was a laugh for me, not sure if it was intentional.
Th...
I started reading this because one of my big interests is with angels. With a name...
During my first read, when I came across the flashback scenes, I wasn't sure I'd b...
So I read the entire script and I see what people like about it. Also, I see what ...
You have a guess already? Let me know, PM me for sure. Very excited with what you ...
japostol,
Thanks for the comments. It keeps me going when I think this is just ...
Hey Juice,
I went over this script and it's still rough. The idea isn't new to ...
Hi Estee,
Got around to reading your 8 pages, outline, and the character mockup...
Thanks for the comment Estee, glad you found it funny.
It's difficult for me to...
Great script. Lots of tongue-in-cheek humor; overly dramatic cliches that are sure...
If you are going to rewrite it, you can get technical points from the forum or scr...
First off, let me say this is what movies are about.
Structurally: tight, inter...
With names like XXXXXX and YYYYYY, I think it's fair to ask for more.
>.<
Why?
A solid intro and a strong set up for things to come. One gripe I did have was wi...
I was reading Broken Radio, and while it's not done yet, there's already a lot su...