Olivia's Comments
To be honest, it's not very funny, and you'd do better coming up with your own ide...
I think that it's a really well done script, but the gay stereotypes are a bit muc...
It was an alright script, but with little to no dialogue. I have some crits:
Th...
Really well done! Not that funny though.
Introducing with no introduction, as effective as it is, needs to stop somewhere. ...
There's nothing very interesting or original about it. Every aspect of this story ...
The dialogue is well done, and realistic, but the random scene changes are a bit odd.
Well written, and it's funny... but chuckle funny. Quite high brow in my opinion, ...
An assassin? A ninja-type suit?
Truth Williams speaks all the clichés and say ...
I think it's a promising idea, but I also think you should make it longer. Maybe i...
It's horribly short, and the plot is wafer thin. How about adding a few twists, an...
Looks like it's going well so far, but don't forget to do extensive planning for t...
That 'Baby, I love you' bit is a bit cheesy and unrealistic, and sos is the bit wh...
The script seems really intriguing! One improvement would be to change the tense i...
It's a great script, botched by the clichéd jock-ish boyfriend, the stereotyped w...
It'd be funny for a small sketch, but the jokes are a little tired, and the delive...
I think the script was brilliant!
I think the plot twists worked well, but you put in too many. These characters are...